Blog week 11

 Blog week 11

6/4/22

hi miss!💕💖💗 I hope you have had a good week I am well with a lot of energy to continue working on all the tasks that you give us I have sincerely enjoyed all the tasks that you have left us since I always end up improving myself and learning more I love being able to practice my English in different ways either oral or written.

I really liked making compositions And I wouldn't be surprised if it became a hobby since I love to draw and write when I do my blogs Normally I like them to be organized and I play background music to enjoy the couple doing it with a lot of patience and that is very pretty.

in the last task that he left us was to make the composition But this time we trying to persuade the reader is something that I really like to do since I can defend my point of view on things.👀💥💟

Here I attach my homework:

EVALUATION N°2 - PERSUASIVE PARAGRAPH

Prewritting: mapping

makeup prohibited in schools

Drafting

When I was in high school, my friends and I would always talk about how much we liked to wear a bit of blush on the cheeks accompanied by a transparent lipstick so that our lips did not look so dry and a bit of mascara since that made us feel that we were organized without changing our face much since we did not put on kilos of makeup made us feel more confident because we already knew we were pretty without it we are just highlighting our features since I was very little for some reason Is it bad for us girls to put on a little makeup for school?

I understand the case of school uniforms, it is different because, well, they want us all to look the same, ordered with that, there are no complaints, but I never understood why it was so forbidden to wear a little makeup so as not to look so sleepy. I have the best testimony that it was my own experience once I was very awake because there was a lot of homework so when I woke up the next day I had huge bags under my eyes and my eyes looked dull I did not want my colleagues to see me like that, much less my teachers were going to think I was sick so what I did was I got some of my mom's concealer and some mascara,  I remember that one of the teachers who didn't even go to my classroom saw me and got very angry, she grabbed my arm and yelled at me, I had to go remove it all, I didn't listen to her and she just directed me to my class, what I wanted to do was go to my class and study like anyone else, that teacher followed me around the school and forced me to go to the bathroom and take off the little I brought.

I do disagree that schools prohibit wearing makeup, I understand if they are black shadows or red lipstick, but it is ridiculous that they do not let you enter a class because of what you wear on your face, what I use should not affect me in my study and the school in general.

 

Revising- Editing and proofreading

When I(i) was in high school, my friends and I(i) would always talk about how much we liked to wear a bit of blush on the cheeks accompanied by a transparent lipstick so that our lips did not look so dry and a bit of mascara since that made us feel that we were organized without changing our face much since we did not put on kilos of(change to “tons of”) makeup made us feel more confident because we already knew we were pretty without(add a comma “,”)it we are just highlighting our features since I was very little for some reason Is it bad for us girls to put on a Little (add “bit”) makeup for school?

I understand the case of school uniforms, it is different because, well, they want us all to look the same, ordered with that, there are no complaints,(erease this) but I never understood why it was so forbidden to wear a little makeup so as not to look(change to “to look less”) so sleepy. I have the best testimony that it was my own experience once I was very awake because there was a lot of homework so when I woke up the next day I had huge bags under my eyes and my eyes(too much “m yeyes” change to “they”) looked dull (add a comma “,”)I did not want my colleagues(“classmates”) to see me like that much less my teachers (add a comma and “they”) were going to think I was sick so what I did was I(change to “that i”) got some of my mom's concealer and some mascara,  I remember that one of the teachers who didn't even go to my classroom saw me and got very angry, she grabbed my arm and yelled at me, I had to go remove it all, I didn't listen to her and she just directed me to my class, what I wanted to do was go to my class and study like anyone else, that teacher followed me around the school and forced me to go to the bathroom and take off the little I brought.

I do disagree that schools prohibit wearing makeup, (but) I understand if they are(were) black shadows or red lipstick, but it is ridiculous that they do not let you enter a class because of what you wear on your face, what I use should not affect me in my study and the school in general. I can still get to class early, be super responsible and look good and pretty to attend classes.

 

Publishing

makeup prohibited in schools

When i was in high school, my friends and i would always talk about how much we liked to wear a bit of blush on the cheeks accompanied by a transparent lipstick so that our lips did not look so dry and a bit of mascara since that made us feel that we were organized without changing our face much since we did not put tons of makeup made us feel more confident because we already knew we were pretty without it, we are just highlighting our features since it was very little and for some reason Is it bad for us girls to put on a bit makeup for school?

I understand the case of school uniforms, it is different because, well, they want us all to look the same, but I never understood why it was so forbidden to wear a little makeup to look less  sleepy. I have the best testimony that it was my own experience once I was very awake because there was a lot of homework so when i woke up the next day i had huge bags under my eyes and they looked dull, i did not want my classmates to see me like that much less my teachers, they were going to think i was sick so what i did was that i got some of my mom's concealer and some mascara, i remember that one of the teachers who didn't even go to my classroom saw me and got very angry, she grabbed my arm and yelled at me,i had to go remove it all, i didn't listen to her and she just directed me to my class, what i just wanted to do was go to my class and study like anyone else, that teacher followed me around the school and forced me to go to the bathroom and take off the little I brought.

I do disagree that schools prohibit wearing makeup, but i understand if they were black shadows or red lipstick, but it is ridiculous that they do not let you enter a class because of what you wear on your face, what i use should not affect me in my study and the school in general. I can still get to class early, be super responsible and look good and pretty to attend classes.