Blog week 9

 Blog week 9

23/03/22

Hello miss💗😁, I hope you have a nice week.💛

 Well I want to start by saying that I love the last assigned activity, I love landscapes, open places and going out in general either alone, with family or friends too. In the two assigned activities that you left us we had to describe our favorite place, and it was something that I enjoyed writing in detail.😋⛺.

In the first activity I told why I liked to go to the place and attached images, here it is:

In the second activity, I learned a new prewriting technique that was very interesting for me to work on, it would never have occurred to me to divide the 5 senses to have an idea of what I want to talk about or refer to;

PRACTICE N°3 - DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPH

Prewritting

“What i learned and my experience going to the beach with my family”

touch	smell	sound	taste	sight
Sand Water	Fresh air Salt Fish Meat Sunscreen	Ocean Music Laughs	Tasty food Salty	Really bright sunlight. The sea People Animals landscape

 

Drafting

My family and I have always liked going to the beach, we believe that it is a very fun and refreshing activity to relax for a while in the city since there are many activities that you can do, for example, go to the pool for a while to swim, we play beach volleyball or beach soccer or with the ball in general we usually play music and talk for hours, laughing, enjoying the time lying on the sand, we really like being able to eat the fish and the very tasty food. I especially love the beach because I feel that it is a very peaceful place with beautiful views when the sun sets you see incredible colors in the sky plus the sound of the waves for me going to the beach is extremely fun Although most of the time I ended up super burnt from not using enough sunscreen.

once my mom told me to accompany her to walk around the seashore and I very happily agreed to go with her my mom brought a bag with her and I wondered why,  normally she likes to find little shells with unique colors or shapes to collect but I didn't see any shells in the bag some time after walking I started noticing that she is looking for trash that was lying on the sand. the bag was big so everything I had collected during the time we were walking filled the bag I decided to help her I didn't have a bag but I had my hands So we spent a good time cleaning all the bottles, papers, plastic that were around.

When we got home that day I saw that during the week my mother had not thrown away the rubbish she had collected, well no, most of them had kept some glass and plastic, then at the end of the week I realized that she had used what she had collected to recycle it and be able to make crafts with them Whether they were decorations for the house or used the glass to make a mirror decoration. So what I learned in this trip to the beach is that it's important to clean and always try to help keep it clean and it doesn't have to be boring you can always transform something that maybe doesn't make sense into a piece of art.

Revising- Editing and proofreading

My family and I(i) have always liked going to the beach, we believe that it is a very fun and refreshing activity to relax for a while in the city since there are many activities that you can do, for example, go to the pool for a while to swim, we(erase this)play beach volleyball or beach soccer or with the ball in general we usually play music and talk for hours, laughing, enjoying the time lying on the sand, we(add “also”) really like being able to eat the(erase this) fish and the very tasty food. I especially love the beach because I feel(change to “think”) that it is(replase to “its”) a very peaceful place with beautiful views when the sun sets you see(add “can see”) incredible colors in the sky (add  comma ,)plus the sound of the waves for me going to the beach is extremely fun (add a comma ,) A(a)lthough most of the time I ended up (add “being”) super burnt from not using enough sunscreen.

o(O)nce my mom told me to accompany her to walk(replase to “walk with her”) around the seashore and I(i) very happily agreed to go with her (add a comma ,)my mom brought a bag with her and I wondered why,  normally she likes to find little shells with unique colors or shapes to collect but I didn't see any shells in the bag (add a comma ,) some time after walking I(i) started noticing that she is(was) looking for trash that was lying on the sand. the bag was big so everything I had (“she had”) collected during the time we were walking filled the bag I(i) decided to help her I(i) didn't have a bag but I(i) had my hands S(s)o we spent a good time cleaning (add “and picking up”) all the bottles, papers, plastic that were around.

When we got home that day I(i) saw that during the week my mother had not thrown away the rubbish she had collected, well no(erase this), most of them (add a comma ,) (add “she”) had kept some glass and plastic, then at the end of the week I(i) realized that she had used what she had collected to recycle it and be able to make crafts with them W(w)hether they were decorations for the house or used the glass to make a mirror decoration. So what I learned in this trip to the beach is that it's important to clean and always try to help keep it clean (replase this part and add “to help the environment, to avoid pollution, global warming and more” instead) and it doesn't have to be boring  (add a comma ,)you can always transform something that maybe doesn't make sense into a piece of art.

Publishing

“What i learned and my experience going to the beach with my family”

My family and i have always liked going to the beach, we believe that it is a very fun and refreshing activity to relax for a while in the city since there are many activities that you can do, for example, go to the pool for a while to swim, play beach volleyball or beach soccer or with the ball in general we usually play music and talk for hours, laughing, enjoying the time lying on the sand, we also really like being able to eat fish and the very tasty food. I especially love the beach because I think that its a very peaceful place with beautiful views when the sun sets you can see incredible colors in the sky, plus the sound of the waves for me going to the beach is extremely fun, although most of the time I ended up being super burnt from not using enough sunscreen.

Once my mom told me to walk with her around the seashore and i, very happily agreed to go with her, my mom brought a bag with her and I wondered why,  normally she likes to find little shells with unique colors or shapes to collect but I didn't see any shells in the bag, some time after walking i started noticing that she was looking for trash that was lying on the sand. the bag was big so everything she had collected during the time we were walking filled the bag i decided to help her i didn't have a bag but i had my hands so we spent a good time cleaning and picking up all the bottles, papers, plastic that were around.

When we got home that day i saw that during the week my mother had not thrown away the rubbish she had collected, well no, most of them, she had kept some glass and plastic, then at the end of the week i realized that she had used what she had collected to recycle it and be able to make crafts with them whether they were decorations for the house or used the glass to make a mirror decoration. So what I learned in this trip to the beach is that it's important to clean to help the environment, to avoid pollution, global warming and more, and it doesn't have to be boring, you can always transform something that maybe doesn't make sense into a piece of art.

 thank you very much for reading!💔💕💖💗